OHMYGOOODDD!!! MY MIND EXPLODED THIS IS BRILLIANT!

I'm glad you like it! ^^

@Angel: Thank you! I'll be sure to use other users more in the next chapter!
@Neriah: Thank you! I'm normally good with spelling, (I normally pay attention to the there/their/they're, but I was a little out of it.) but I really had no idea how to spell cinched. Thank you for pointing that out!

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This is incredible. I love it, you've done a really good job..

hehe yaaaay Secret Agents<3 Love it<3

I love it! Do post more, please! I want to be in! Hehehe...

Anyways, it's amazing, and I think you should continue! Love it, love it! :)

Hello! I've decided to post all of it in here, soooo yeah.... Again, please tell me of any spelling or grammar mistakes, and enjoy! I'll be sure to continue using more and more players, and clear up what's happening.

March 3, 8:29 P. M.
  "So everyone knows the plan, and their part?" Major Malu asked.
  They nodded.
  "I have a question." Agent Subway asked.
  "Yes?"
  "If she'll be staying here at base, What's Agent Spider's part in this?"
  Agent Spider smirked, and looked at Major Malu. "Should we show them, Major?"
  She nodded. "If you'll follow me." she said.
  "Over the past few months, Agent Shadow and I have been making some new machines." Agent Spider said. "And while I clearly don't have time to tell you about them, seeing as we've spent two days planning, but they are simple enough for me to explain." she walked up to a door, and pulled out a key. "Here we go." she said, unlocking the door.
  Inside, a vast arrangement of electronics was scattered. From communication devices that looked like braces, to vehicles that made you wonder how it fit in the room.
  "This is where Agent Spider comes in." Major Malu said. "As she is an expert in her designs, she will be staying at base, but she'll have communication with all of you."
  Agent Spider held out an open brief case containing a dozen pairs earrings. "These are earrings with built in speakers, and microphones. They work, I tested them last month. Plus, you'll look fabulous." she waited as they all took a pair. "These are all linked with my headphones here at base. Over the speaker, I'll tell you how to work the devices."
  Major Malu spoke up. "Agent Angel, as the professional escape artist, we've put you in control of all of the transportation methods in this room."
"I updated your bike to go faster than before, and it's painted in more reflective paint, which is good for camouflage."
  Agent Angel smiled, looking at her motorcycle.
  "Now, Lieutenant Dark will also be staying to help with some situations."
  "And remember, Agent Angel, if I report to you that someone is in need of medical attention, you must stop what you're doing, and go help them get back here." Agent Spider reminded.
  "Now," Major Malu said. "Is everyone ready?"
"Yes, sir!" they replied in unison.

March 4, 1:07 A. M.
  "Agent Rukia, do you copy?"
  "I copy, Agent Spider. I'm at the south window."
  "Understood. Agent Rare, do you-"
  "I copy, Agent Spider. I'm by the northern side of the roof."
  Agent Spider huffed, then continued. "I see. Agent Subway, do you copy?"
  "I copy. I'm at the eastern window."
  "Alright. Agent Rocker, I trust you copy?"
  "Of course. I'm at the western fire exit."
  "Alright. Do you all have the grappling hooks I told you to get?"
  "Yes, sir." they replied.
  "Good. You see the blue button? Press that."
  Agent Rare pressed the button, and the hook shot out the barrel of the firearm. It landed and hooked on the roof.
  "Now press it again twice."
  Agent Rare obeyed, and suddenly lurched upward, onto the roof ledge, and climbed up.
  "Is every one at their spots?"
  "Yes, sir." they said.
  "Now hit the red button."
  The hook injected back into the barrel of the gun.
  "Now, Agent Rocker, do you see the square box by the right hand side?"
  "I do."
  "I need you to hack into the system, and shut off all alarms."
  "I'm doing it right now." she responded. A long pause followed.
  "Agent Rocker, have you hacked into the system yet?"
  "Yes, I did that a while ago, there's just a slight problem." Agent Rocker confessed.
  Agent Spider sighed, and glanced at Lieutenant Dark, who was frowning. "What would that problem be?" the Lieutenant asked.
  "Everything is in Chinese."
  Lieutenant Dark cursed.
  "Of course, Fujimot Basta is Chinese." Agent Spider said. She thought for a moment. "Alright, Agent Rocker, in your hip satchel, do you see the round thing that looks like an egg?"
  "Yes," She answered.
  "Okay, take that out, and unscrew the top. Once you've done that, set it on top the screen. It should project a translated hologram." she paused. "Did it work?"
  "Yes, sir. All alarms turned off."
  "Good job. Everyone, proceed to enter."
  Agent Rare pointed her watch at the roof, and pressed a button, ejecting a laser, and cutting through the roof, supposedly above an air vent.
She hooked her fingers under the circle she had cut, and pulled it out. She set it aside, and gracefully slipped inside.
  "Has everyone successfully infiltrated the building?" Agent Spider asked.
  "You say that like it's a bad thing." Agent Rukia said.
  "I'll take that as a yes?"
  "Yes." Agent Subway said.
  "Alright, everyone, head to your right."
  "Head to their Right?" Lieutenant Dark asked, covering her microphone.
  Agent Spider did likewise. "Mr. Basta is a very simplistic man. After Agent Rocker hacked into his files for me, I examined his blue prints, and all his air vents have something of a maze to them. If you continue going right from a certain point, you end up in the cell area."
  "I see." the Lieutenant said, and uncovered the microphone.
  Agent Spider cleared her throat. "Can I get a status update, Agent Rocker?"
  "Nothing new, I see a light up ahead, but I don't think it's the cell area."
  "Agent Rare?"
  "I see the cell area, I'm right above it. Should I go in?"
  "Yes," Lieutenant Dark said.
  Agent Rare popped off the metal, and jumped down. "I'm in." she whispered. "I don't see Agen-" she froze. There was something hard against her back.
  "Agent Rare?" Agent Spider said. "Agent Rare, what is going on?"
  The agent didn't speak. She knew it was a gun being pressed against her.

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Gasp! Oh my gosh! I love it! My character is so much like me, since I always have questions! Lol! But why did you stop now ?! It is getting so interesting! I need to read more!And that little part where Rare climbs in by the roof is awesome, by the way. As I was reading, I had this spy agent/secret mission music in my head, so I hummed that agent tune while I was reading, and it really adds to the atmosphere! But please, please continue this story as soon as possible! I want to know what happens next! :)

Thank you!
I'm glad you like it, Angel!
Lol, Subway, I'll have to do that next time I read it! :D
Oh, thank you so much Neriah, oh my gosh, I have no idea how I missed that!

Suspenseee!!!

Ironically, I'm mostly Chinese but I still suck at reading Chinese haha.

OH MY SPIDERS, SPIDER!!! I love it!! You must keep it up, and I must read more. Please do some more as soon as you can.
  I love that I am in it to! I can imagine that if I was an agent that I would probably be the one to get caught. :P
  All so, on the second chapter, you said 'I updated you bike'. I just cought that there. Any way LOVE IT!

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH! LUFF IT!!!!!!!!

You got my business side pretty accurately actually :D I'm like that in meetings, hehe. Just ask my coworkers!

Other than that, though, I want to applaude your writing skills. I want to also let you know that even though it's been only a few days ago since you posted the first chapter, both your language and storytelling skills improved a lot! That's impressive! You were a great writer, but if you keep this up, I think you're going to have a great future ahead of  you :)

Gahhh <3 Again, loved it!

Can't wait for the comic!!